08年6月大学英语六级作文最后五道预测题:part1

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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of  Immoral Behavior in Public. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
0 w0 ^6 n% W9 y( ~' W) B. N/ O2 A' N1.我们经常在公共场合见到各种不道德的行为，叙述你的一次相关经历。
' o! u5 m2 u6 k2 H( u& C! l2.这些不文明行为会有哪些影响。
3.我们应该怎样改善这种现象。
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' ?5 |% O% F$ h9 y. W5 x审题概述?
! ]0 Y# f8 ?/ y* F! F7 V3 o* V$ V这是一篇议论文，可以根据作文要求列出提纲：第一部分，列举不文明行为并叙述一次相关经历；第二部分，不文明行为的影响，一两个即可；第三部分，提出建议。

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【范文】
2 K  \% t7 S; ~9 U+ Q$ ZImmoral Behavior in Public

To witness ①immoral behavior in public, one need only visit the Beijing subway. I still remember the first time I took the Beijing subway. It was an early morning. I was in a hurry to go to school. When I was trying to get a ticket, I found a lot of people waiting in front of me, but nobody was in the line.

①Immoral behaviors in public ②initiate a series of problems. One of the most serious ones is that it may exert a negative impact on our ③sense of social responsibility. We will keep ignoring other people’s rights and feelings, and in turn, we too will be disrespected some day.
The reform of ①this phenomenon is certainly not easy. With an eye on practical ②implementation  and ③cost effectiveness , I propose that society make it clear in every way that people who fail to respect the ④common good will be seriously punished. Stricter policies for this should be made to correct this phenomenon as soon as possible.
We all expect “A World without Thieves". Everyone ①shares the huge responsibility of ②demonstrating his or her justice at the proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious socialist society.
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第一段思路点评
作文要求第一点，相关经历

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1.immoral behavior in public：直接点题

第二段思路点评
不文明行为的影响
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1.immoral behavior in public：重复名词词组，与第一段衔接
2.initiate：意思是“产生，发动”
# M5 r) H, e- D1 S3.sense of social responsibility：意思是“社会责任感”

5 M2 `. k/ n+ y4 T第三段思路点评
" [! F& w: i/ b8 G, T如何改善这些现象
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. f, _3 l# V7 }2 Q- S" w1.this phenomenon：指代前文“immoral behavior in public”，
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2.implementation：意为“执行，实施”
0 x- Y* l' `, J+ [! b5 M  D9 B6 O3.cost effectiveness：意为“成本效率”
4.common good：意为“公益”

7 S" e* {" w3 x# F第四段思路点评
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4 s" q3 P$ M3 F: x3 p总结

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4 j" d- k: \$ ^0 [1share a huge responsibility: 意为“承担重大责任”
1 q/ T8 d  D, Y. d, O: R+ B, o2.demonstrate：意为“展现”